Saturday, July 31, 2010

Centus #13/Biking

This is Saturday Centus # 13 The prompt must be used word for word somewhere in the story.The prompt is highlighted. For complete rules see:http://jennymatlock.blogspot.com.

“Don’t worry, I will have your bike fixed by Friday,” said Jeb when he saw her tears.



Molly never meant to get old; she thought she could fight it. She accepted the butt spread, covered the gray, ignored the crow’s feet, but it was the insidious things like stiffening in her knees, the tighter turn of her neck that was becoming the bane of her life. Age had crept in on her like tide water on sand, easing away tiny grains of joy daily. Bike riding was her last freedom, that’s why it meant so much, and she did not want to give it up.

18 comments:

jfb57 said...

Oh how brilliant! You have almost described me!!Sadly my back will not let me cycle but I can walk on the treadmill!

Viki said...

What a perfectly excellent post describing aging. Unfortunately, I know some of it first hand, ha. Really good centus and I absolutely love what you did with this prompt.

My name is PJ. said...

Boy, can I identify with holding onto the last vestiges of youthful capability! Perfectly done!

June Freaking Cleaver said...

I'm on my way, with the aging, only no gray hair yet (though I've earned a headful of the stuff).

Starting to feel like Dorothy's Tin Man, maybe I Just need some oil?

Jenny said...

This is wonderful. Clinging to what we have instead of what we have not.

I really enjoyed this unusual and honest use of this prompt.

It spoke to me.

Thank you.

Linda O'Connell said...

It really is the simple things that make us happy. Your story is a perfect example and you sure do have a way with words.

Vicki said...

YEP, hang on with the last thread of whatever...Get on thatbike and ride into the sunset! Great way to take this.

Tgoette said...

I loved your story, Claudia! I'm feeling the effects of Old Father Time myself so I can relate! Terrific use of the prompt this week!

easternsparkle said...

Oh, how I am with that description, I can just about manage my bike nowadays, just getting my foot high enough to step over can be a challenge tho'!!

Cheryl said...

Great use of the prompt. I feel your pain.

Tina said...

Nice. Especially loved your comparison of tide and again..."easing away tiny grains of joy". GREAT line.

Sue said...

Oh, you really got me with this one! My mom (a concert violinist) had to give up playing her violin because of arthritis, so this resonates.

Loved it!

=)

Tina said...

awww good for your character who wanted to keep strong. made me really feel for her.

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linda said...

Oh, this hit home.

Nice story.

~Lissa said...

I really like how you structured this story! It really brought me in with the beginning of her in tears, and the end wrapped everything together nicely! Good job!

Malisa said...

Have you been peeking in my windows? I know that everyone knows about the butt spread, but I wasn't aware that you knew about the stiff joints! Sigh.
This story was so full of truth. I loved this line: "Age had crept in on her like tide water on sand, easing away little grains of joy daily." Wow!

I just posted my tardy contribution for the week. Hope you will stop by and read!

Malisa

Terra said...

Oh man, I know someone who did that very thing! I have a huge smile on my face right now. Fabulous.

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