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I have not done any online fiction writing in a long while.
I do love to participate in Friday Fictioneers, and I dropped in this morning
to see what I have been missing. This is a 100 word piece of writing done in
response to a picture. I had no intention of writing, but when I saw the
picture, a whole scene popped into my mind just like that! While Rochelle
herself saw a gentle scene, my own creative effort was tinged with some
violence. I guess that is because I am reading Wildwood Boys about the ruffians along the Kansas-Missouri border
during the Bleeding Kansas days. It is great writing, by the way.
Speaking of writing, Rochelle does great writing herself. Her book of short stories is a fantastic read. To check out her Friday Fictioneers go here: http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com My story is 96 words.
Revenge Is Sharp
Bell, short for Bellingham, was eating with his family at
the Bamboo Garden. His parents listened to his sisters’s chatter. Bell was
hearing only voices from lunch rattle in his head like marbles in a metal tin.
“Hey, Ding Dong, ya eatin’ that cake?” He watched as they
poked straws full of sucked up milk into dessert on his lunch tray. The cake collapsed
to mush, the boys laughed drawing attention from other tables. Bell wanted to
fade away.
Bell fingered the unopened chopsticks and slipped them in
his pocket thinking of tomorrow’s lunch at school.
12 comments:
I don't think this is going to end well... Good work!
I don't think this is going to end well... Good work!
What a dark piece of flash fiction. It's taut and tense. I'm going to be careful when I'm around you, Claudia. Who knows what lurks under that calm exterior... ;)
The idea of that squirted milk is not very appetizing. Well done. Alicia Jamtaas
I've never heard of that trick of sticking milk in cake. Pretty disgusting. Sounds like they picked on him for the last time.
Revenge is sharp, pointed - and sometimes very sweet.
Great flash fiction! Seems like you should play that meme more often! And loved your impromptu tea party, how fun. And your hubby is quite the wood maker - love the quilt... errr table cloth holder!
Revenge is a dish best served the following day, with chopsticks. Nicely done.
OOOH what a cliffhanger. You are good at these!
Dear Claudia,
I see what's coming. Those boys better watch their step tomorrow.
Well done.
Thanks for the plug for my book.
shalom,
Rochelle
Claudia, Good and well-written story with especially good description.I don't think I want to know what form tomorrow's revenge is going to take.It's bound to be messy.Well done. :)---Susan
Oh that horrible awkwardness! Tender story; nice job! Strangely, I live in Bellingham... I had to read that part twice!
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