Wednesday, July 23, 2014

Friday Fictioneers/Revenge Is Sharp


I have not done any online fiction writing in a long while. I do love to participate in Friday Fictioneers, and I dropped in this morning to see what I have been missing. This is a 100 word piece of writing done in response to a picture. I had no intention of writing, but when I saw the picture, a whole scene popped into my mind just like that! While Rochelle herself saw a gentle scene, my own creative effort was tinged with some violence. I guess that is because I am reading Wildwood Boys about the ruffians along the Kansas-Missouri border during the Bleeding Kansas days. It is great writing, by the way.

Speaking of writing, Rochelle does great writing herself. Her book of short stories is a fantastic read. To check out her Friday Fictioneers go here: http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com  My story is 96 words.






                                                           Revenge Is Sharp
Bell, short for Bellingham, was eating with his family at the Bamboo Garden. His parents listened to his sisters’s chatter. Bell was hearing only voices from lunch rattle in his head like marbles in a metal tin.

“Hey, Ding Dong, ya eatin’ that cake?” He watched as they poked straws full of sucked up milk into dessert on his lunch tray. The cake collapsed to mush, the boys laughed drawing attention from other tables. Bell wanted to fade away.


Bell fingered the unopened chopsticks and slipped them in his pocket thinking of tomorrow’s lunch at school. 

12 comments:

waitingforaname said...

I don't think this is going to end well... Good work!

waitingforaname said...

I don't think this is going to end well... Good work!

Sioux said...

What a dark piece of flash fiction. It's taut and tense. I'm going to be careful when I'm around you, Claudia. Who knows what lurks under that calm exterior... ;)

Anonymous said...

The idea of that squirted milk is not very appetizing. Well done. Alicia Jamtaas

greenwalledtower said...

I've never heard of that trick of sticking milk in cake. Pretty disgusting. Sounds like they picked on him for the last time.

Elephant's Child said...

Revenge is sharp, pointed - and sometimes very sweet.

Lynn said...

Great flash fiction! Seems like you should play that meme more often! And loved your impromptu tea party, how fun. And your hubby is quite the wood maker - love the quilt... errr table cloth holder!

Sandra Crook said...

Revenge is a dish best served the following day, with chopsticks. Nicely done.

Linda O'Connell said...

OOOH what a cliffhanger. You are good at these!

Rochelle Wisoff-Fields said...

Dear Claudia,

I see what's coming. Those boys better watch their step tomorrow.

Well done.

Thanks for the plug for my book.

shalom,

Rochelle

P.S. Joshi said...

Claudia, Good and well-written story with especially good description.I don't think I want to know what form tomorrow's revenge is going to take.It's bound to be messy.Well done. :)---Susan

talesfromthemotherland.me said...

Oh that horrible awkwardness! Tender story; nice job! Strangely, I live in Bellingham... I had to read that part twice!