Saturday, September 18, 2010

Saturday Centus #20, Play Ball!

This is Saturday Centus . The prompt must be used word for word somewhere in the story on not more than 100 words.The prompt is highlighted. For complete rules see:http://jennymatlock.blogspot.com. I have highlighted this week's prompt in piece below.

Play Ball!


Shelly finished weekend reports for her boss, folded the last load of laundry and started to vacuum when she tripped over the puckered football, slightly deflated like herself. How many times had she asked Tad to pick it up this week?


She lost her temper, aimed her clenched foot, swung, and connected with a chair leg. Blood squirted over the carpet while her toe transformed into a ripe blue plum.


"This is never going to come out," she thought as she scrubbed at the spot on the worn carpet.


She heard Tad and cronies slam car doors returning from the game. “Out damn spot,” she heard Macbeth in her head as she rubbed the blood deeper into the fibers.


 

20 comments:

Susan Anderson said...

Temper, temper!

;)

PS. I couldn't quite make myself stay away from Macbeth, either! Nice job.

People Who Know Me Would Say: said...

Flaring tempers don't do much good, do they?

I did my centus based on a scene in Macbeth and no one got it. Oy.

Deborah said...

Oh I love this!!

jfb57 said...

Ouch! How many times have I almost done that! Great post!

Cheryl said...

Funny one! Damn fine.

Kat said...

I think Tad is in for an earful when he walks through that door! Really well done, I can feel her frustration. "her toe transformed into a ripe blue plum" - great line!

Rawknrobyn.blogspot.com said...

This is a fun piece, just not a fun time for Shelly.
Cheers,
xoRobyn

Viki said...

Uh oh, Tad's going to be in big trouble, I think lol. Good job.

Terra said...

Oh man. Bummer. I broke a toe by stubbing it on a wall last summer (not a temper thing) but embarrassing none the less. So all I could do was feel the pain of that toe as it connected with the chair...OW>

Ames said...

Oooh if I had done that Tad would have heard me from the driveway. Jumpin around in pain, yelling "My toe! My toe" Tad should run!! LOL~Ames.

Stef said...

Ouch!! I've done that before...kinda

Susannah said...

:-) I love this! Nice use of the prompt.

Unknown said...

OUCH! Wow, that must've hurt like the dickens if it caused her to bleed! I'd be even more mad at that darn football since it's the reason for the blood and the swollen toe. I think Tad's gonna get a verbal beating now...

Tgoette said...

Nicely done, Claudia! I'd hate to be Tad right now!

jeff campbell said...

Fine writing...Tad in trouble ;-) Peace

~Lissa said...

Ahh stubbed toes are the worst, especially when you're already feeling, "slightly deflated." Clever take on the SC!

Tina said...

ouch i felt her pain right there and it made my foot feel funny lol

Tina

Unknown said...

Poor Shelly. Use COLD water on blood stains as soon as you can. Hot water sets blood stains. Now you know, all of you who plan to write crime fiction!
Great take on the theme. I like the fact that you kept it everyday and did not make her a murderess. There is plenty of blood in every day life!
Good work!

Best wishes,
Anna
Sara Cat purrs.

Anna's SC-Week-20
Sara Cat's SC-Week-20

Jenny said...

I deliberately made myself stay away from Macbeth but now I wish I would have followed my first instincts.

Really great use of the prompt. I've done that myself a time or two.

And, oh, oh, oh that throbbing toe.

Thanks for a great read.

cj Schlottman said...

Ouch! I hate it when I hurt myself instead of the one who really deserves it!

Thanks for a great centus..................cj