Saturday, June 26, 2010

Saturday Centus #8

Want a way to practice writing scenes? Tightening lines? Come write with Jenny’s writing promt. Each linked essay must be 100 words or less, not including the "prompt" words. The prompt words can be used in any place within your story but must be left intact. To do Saturday Centus, use Jenny Matlock’s writing prompt found at http://jennymatlock.blogspot.com/2010/06/saturday-centus-week-7.html

Prompt:“Did you notice Elizabeth in class this morning and how forlorn she seemed?"


Perhaps I will write her a comforting note, I thought.
 
 
Getting an Education
I studied her in the lecture hall. French roll pinned perfectly, eyes attentive to professor, the filigree E on her matching cardigan plummeting down to her pert breast points. But I knew her fingers meditating the single stand of pearls were remembering last night at the lake with animal-like frat boys.



“Did you notice Elizabeth in class this morning and how forlorn she seemed?"


Perhaps I will write her a comforting note, I thought. After all, no one needed an education like she got last night.


“Oh, probably just listening to old Dinmore on the Greeks. That’s enough to make anyone look pitiful,” I turned the topic while I watched Elizabeth amble across the oval, her books clutched close to her chest.

16 comments:

jfb57 said...

Umm! Very good.Really liked the description of Elizabeth.

Cheryl said...

Wow, you knocked this one out of the ballpark. Too often too true.

Sami said...

Amazing take on this. Very well written!!

Viki said...

I liked this very much. I loved the description of Elizabeth. Oh and I had to LOL at the professor too. Great Centus.

Sue said...

This is excellent! I can't believe the quality of these little stories. Just when I think I've seen the "best" one, the next one amazes me.

Which is what yours just did.

=)

mbkatc230 said...

Great description of Elizabeth. My favorite line? "fingers meditating the single strand of pearls" Beautiful! Kathy

Tgoette said...

Great job this week, Claudia! A really excellent effort!

Tina said...

This was very well done. In just 100 words you made me see several chapters. Wonderful.

Mama Zen said...

Wow. This is heart wrenching.

Malisa said...

I always suspected that about Elizabeth! :) Nicely done!

RNSANE said...

Poor Elizabeth...pearls and an initiation by frat boys. Wonder if she has white gloves as well.

My name is PJ. said...

This is the great kind of story that you listen to so intently, you don't realize you're holding your breath!

Terra said...

Oh man, that was excellent. Still thinking about it.

Jenny said...

Claudia, I think this might be your best effort yet. This was perfect. Each word a shining jewel in the story setting.

I will be thinking of this one for days to come.

Thank you for linking.

mrs. c said...

this was such an interesting story, it kinda reminded me of "The Way We Were". Such great discription. Thanks for reading my story.

Tina said...

oooh i wonder what happended at the lake? Intriging.

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