Saturday, June 19, 2010

Saturday Centus #7



Want a way to practice writing scences? Tightening lines? Come write with Jenny’s writing promt. Each linked essay must be 100 words or less, not including the "prompt" words. The prompt words can be used in any place within your story but must be left intact. To do Saturday Centus, use Jenny Matlock’s writing prompt found at http://jennymatlock.blogspot.com/2010/06/saturday-centus-week-7.html


Freed on Father's Day
It was Father’s Day, 1984, when I heard that voice in the hallway and knew the marriage was over. Later, my bawdy Dad and egotistic husband swilled beers near the grill like Marine buddies.



“Can’t get the little woman to cook on your special day?”


I steamed. Randall insisted on grilling. Besides, he wasn’t my father—or anyone’s father.


I wanted a baby; he didn’t. He wanted to remain star of the show. One could tell by the fiberglass boat, archery and hay bales in the backyard, an Olympic assortment of running shoes lined up in the closet, and the latest technology plugged into every outlet of the house.


Two men chortled; I planned escape!

14 comments:

mbkatc230 said...

I just hope she pawns some of those electronic goodies to fund her escape :) Nice take on the prompt. Thanks for stopping by and the too kind comments. Perhaps we both read too much Flannery O'Connor? Oh wait, there's no such thing as too much O'Connor! Kathy

Sue said...

I'm with the teller of this tale. She needs to get outta there!

=)

Viki said...

Oh boy, is she unhappy. Yeah, I think its time for her to escape. Great job.

jeff campbell said...

Wow, what a great take on this prompt! Very well done...and what nice finds from your flea market excursion...Peace and blessings

Linda O'Connell said...

This sounds like fun. Thanks. I like your story.

BECKY said...

Hey Claudia! I loved it. You're really good at these!!

Cheryl said...

Run woman, run! Get outta that hell-hole and LIVE.

Vicki said...

Awww, a new start! Great take on it this week...

jfb57 said...

Gosh, how exciting! You have captured such a lot in this scene! Brill!

Christy said...

I am seriously annoyed at the dad. You did a great job with him. (oh and looser husband too) Excellent!

Tgoette said...

A very original take on this week's prompt! But guys don't really act like that do they? LOL! Good job!

Tina said...

Great one! She really needs to get out of there...perhaps with some of his more expensive toys.

Jewel said...

I would hope that while making that great escape that she takes some of the prized toys to the pawn shop with her...

Jenny said...

Love Tom's comment here.

Love how you twisted this prompt around. You words really portrayed this womans life to me so clearly.

I hope she hits him over the head with the cast iron skillet, takes his wallet and his truck and leaves pronto!

Thanks for linking up!