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Okay, so it is not only Saturday and December now while I am still on a Friday in November. It is time for both Friday Fictioneers and Saturday Centus, both 100 word writings. These exercises are both terrific because if you follow the rules and stay at 100 words, you really have to write tight! For rules about writing with Rochelle's picture prompt and more stories go to http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2012/11/28/30-november-2012/ . Below is this week's picture and my effort.
Franky looked down the empty street, no shoppers as planned
due to dinner hour, and wondered where Paul was. He worried the duct tape would
hold the jeweler long now that the job was done. He heard the tinkle of the
bell ringer in the next block and noticed the crisp lights blinking on store
fronts. The nippy air tapped on his cheeks making his eyes water slightly.
Where was Paul?
The pillowcase, plump as Santa’s belly, shifted as his tense
arm flexed, but he was still alone. Paul’s red Honda slid into the curb. It’d be
a good Christmas!
14 comments:
That was awesome. Great story from this promt.
Wow, that's one way to fund Christmas!
I wonder if all the planning will spare him a stint behind bars?
Good job! :-)
Did he go to Jared??? :-) Gives the "spirit of Christmas" an entirely different meaning. Good job.
looks like someone is getting "ice" for Christmas. A well done story with a good twist at the end.
Dear Claudia,
A nice story with a solid POV. A robber with a conscience and a Christmas time tale full of subtle seasonal references. Good job.
Aloha,
Doug
Christmas spirit of a different nature. Nice one, Claudia. It will be a good Christmas until Franky and Paul get caught.
I know we're called Friday Fictioneers but the stories roll in from Wednesday all the way through Tuesday and beyond sometimes. ;)
well done. a fresh angle for sure.
this sentence seems like there's a word missing, or maybe i'm just not reading it correctly:
He worried the duct tape would hold the jeweler long now that the job was done.
I could feel the tension of waiting for the getaway car, a red Honda. I love it. I'm guessing they don't do this very often.
Unique angle for a Christmas story, Bookie. Very unique.Nice job! Thanks for your visit and comment, too! Susan
A chilling reminder that the pressure of the season drives some people to dark acts of desperation. Well-written story. Ron
That's one way of getting a nice Christmas hopefully he shared it with his poor kids.
Very nice take on the prompt. Well done, and thanks so much for stopping by mine
Not so good for the jeweller :-)
Nice story.
Great story, though feel sorry for the poor jeweler.
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