Saturday, December 1, 2012

Friday Fictioneers



Okay, so it is not only Saturday and December now while I am still on a Friday in November. It is time for both Friday Fictioneers and Saturday Centus, both 100 word writings. These exercises are both terrific because if you follow the rules and stay at 100 words, you really have to write tight! For rules about writing with Rochelle's picture prompt and more stories go to http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2012/11/28/30-november-2012/ . Below is this week's picture and my effort.


 
 

Franky looked down the empty street, no shoppers as planned due to dinner hour, and wondered where Paul was. He worried the duct tape would hold the jeweler long now that the job was done. He heard the tinkle of the bell ringer in the next block and noticed the crisp lights blinking on store fronts. The nippy air tapped on his cheeks making his eyes water slightly. Where was Paul?
The pillowcase, plump as Santa’s belly, shifted as his tense arm flexed, but he was still alone. Paul’s red Honda slid into the curb. It’d be a good Christmas!

 
 

14 comments:

Shirley said...

That was awesome. Great story from this promt.

MysocalledDutchlife said...

Wow, that's one way to fund Christmas!

I wonder if all the planning will spare him a stint behind bars?

Good job! :-)

janet said...

Did he go to Jared??? :-) Gives the "spirit of Christmas" an entirely different meaning. Good job.

billgncs said...

looks like someone is getting "ice" for Christmas. A well done story with a good twist at the end.

Douglas MacIlroy said...

Dear Claudia,

A nice story with a solid POV. A robber with a conscience and a Christmas time tale full of subtle seasonal references. Good job.

Aloha,

Doug

Rochelle Wisoff-Fields said...

Christmas spirit of a different nature. Nice one, Claudia. It will be a good Christmas until Franky and Paul get caught.
I know we're called Friday Fictioneers but the stories roll in from Wednesday all the way through Tuesday and beyond sometimes. ;)

brainsnorts said...

well done. a fresh angle for sure.

this sentence seems like there's a word missing, or maybe i'm just not reading it correctly:

He worried the duct tape would hold the jeweler long now that the job was done.

thebumblefiles said...

I could feel the tension of waiting for the getaway car, a red Honda. I love it. I'm guessing they don't do this very often.

Susan said...

Unique angle for a Christmas story, Bookie. Very unique.Nice job! Thanks for your visit and comment, too! Susan

Anonymous said...

A chilling reminder that the pressure of the season drives some people to dark acts of desperation. Well-written story. Ron

Brudberg said...

That's one way of getting a nice Christmas hopefully he shared it with his poor kids.

Boomie Bol said...

Very nice take on the prompt. Well done, and thanks so much for stopping by mine

Abraham Gumba said...

Not so good for the jeweller :-)
Nice story.

Tessa said...

Great story, though feel sorry for the poor jeweler.