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This week Jenny shows us a picture and asks us to use on 100 words and all our senses to write about the picture. For complete and more stories about the picture, please visit Jenny's blog at:http://jennymatlock.blogspot.com/2011/10/saturday-centus-literary-device.html
Lucy, new to the Ozarks, spied the dwelling. Like a hundred other abandoned places in the Ozark hills, the rickety cabin stood waiting for its family to return. She heard the old screen moan in the slight breeze while mice inside scampered away when she stepped on the rotting porch. She wiped her hand across the siding wishing the splintered wood could talk. Musty air floated from the inside, reminiscent of old bacon grease and the smoky residue from the rock fireplace where many a meal had simmered in a cast iron pot. The walls sighed; were they speaking to her?
11 comments:
"wishing the splintered wood could talk..." me too. I loved this.
This is wonderful! Thanks for the tour through our senses!
"The walls sure are speaking to me". Very well written. I especially enjoyed your description of the mice scampering away. Good job.
Excellent job providing the sensory details the prompt requested. Well done!
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Lovely! Some walls do talk just by their 'being'
I'm sitting here, reading this, and suddenly MY walls begin speaking to me. They are saying "Packrats! Call the exterminator!" This is no joke, either.
Your walls said wonderful things, however, and you nailed the prompt!!!
Nice job!
Great sensory detail (e.g., screen's moaning, mice scampering, smell of old bacon grease...). You really brought us into Lucy's world in the moment. I really enjoyed reading this a couple times.
xoRobyn
Great job! It felt like I was there.
great job of pulling me in. and I love bacon, so you totally had me at the smell of bacon grease.
Oh wow. This was fabulous! I loved how you did this. What a neat little gem of a story!
Super, super well done!
I hope Lucy didn't get spooked!
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