Saturday, October 15, 2011

Saturday Centus/Message from the Past

It is Saturday Centus today, and I have missed so many lately. This morning is the Maple Leaf Parade, our town's salute to autumn. Family is coming and this afternoon is PSU Homecoming game for some of us. Arts and Crafts, outdoor air, and possible adieu to nice days ahead. But it is also my birthday today so I treat myself to a gift of Centus!

This week Jenny shows us a picture and asks us to use on 100 words and all our senses to write about the picture. For complete and more stories about the picture, please visit Jenny's blog at:http://jennymatlock.blogspot.com/2011/10/saturday-centus-literary-device.html



Message from the Past

Lucy, new to the Ozarks, spied the dwelling. Like a hundred other abandoned places in the Ozark hills, the rickety cabin stood waiting for its family to return. She heard the old screen moan in the slight breeze while mice inside scampered away when she stepped on the rotting porch. She wiped her hand across the siding wishing the splintered wood could talk. Musty air floated from the inside, reminiscent of old bacon grease and the smoky residue from the rock fireplace where many a meal had simmered in a cast iron pot. The walls sighed; were they speaking to her?

11 comments:

Koby said...

"wishing the splintered wood could talk..." me too. I loved this.

Anonymous said...

This is wonderful! Thanks for the tour through our senses!

Viki said...

"The walls sure are speaking to me". Very well written. I especially enjoyed your description of the mice scampering away. Good job.

Sue said...

Excellent job providing the sensory details the prompt requested. Well done!

=)

Daydreamertoo said...

Lovely! Some walls do talk just by their 'being'

Judie said...

I'm sitting here, reading this, and suddenly MY walls begin speaking to me. They are saying "Packrats! Call the exterminator!" This is no joke, either.

Your walls said wonderful things, however, and you nailed the prompt!!!

anitamombanita said...

Nice job!

Rawknrobyn.blogspot.com said...

Great sensory detail (e.g., screen's moaning, mice scampering, smell of old bacon grease...). You really brought us into Lucy's world in the moment. I really enjoyed reading this a couple times.
xoRobyn

Mary Elizabeth said...

Great job! It felt like I was there.

Dazee Dreamer said...

great job of pulling me in. and I love bacon, so you totally had me at the smell of bacon grease.

Jenny said...

Oh wow. This was fabulous! I loved how you did this. What a neat little gem of a story!

Super, super well done!

I hope Lucy didn't get spooked!