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I slept well last night which is a bit unusual here. I came to at 5:30 but still did not want to face daylight. I went back to sleep until 7:30, a real oversleep for me! The sun was brilliantly bright coming through the window glass, but the outside air was cold. The tea kettle burbled while I checked in at Saturday Centus. Jenny says today’s prompt of “the chair dominated the small room…” is more traditional and I agree. She allows pictures this week to go with the prompt and 100 words, but I will pass on that. I want words to paint mind pictures, and for the reader to not be influenced by the visions of others.
For more Centus stories, many with pictures I know, and full rules to write Centus, go to Jenny’s blog at: http://jennymatlock.blogspot.com/2012/02/saturday-centus-chair-dominated-small.html
Two silent men, armed muscled like canon barrels, escorted him to a new place.
He could smell an odd odor hover in the air as he was guided down a shadowy tight hallway before being shoved through an open doorway. In a hazy light, the chair dominated the small room. Wires, manacles, chains, and gadgets hung around the chair like bling on a floozy. Behind him the door shut and a gorilla of a man stood up from the shadows.
“So, Jim, are you ready to tell us what we need to know?”
22 comments:
I love this. You really painted a great picture in so few words!
Oh... and don't you hate how stubborn Blogger can be sometimes? I've had trouble with fonts and spacing before. I've also decided that it isn't always worth the time involved to try to fix it.
Oh... and don't you hate how stubborn Blogger can be sometimes? I've had trouble with fonts and spacing before. I've also decided that it isn't always worth the time involved to try to fix it.
This felt tense! "Bling on a floozy", love that:@)
Oh this is just too funny...at first I was hanging on the edge of my chair, not quite sure which way this would land...funny thing too this morning my doggies all thought (on a Saturday even) that it was time to get up and it was still dark outside...!!!
Oh yikes, that was a vividly painted "picture," Bookie! Good job. Bright sunshine here with intermittent fast and furious snow flurries. What the heck? We have had so little snow this winter I say, "Who cares?" if a few inches tumble down. It IS winter. ha ha ha Susan
I love the picture that "bling on a floozy" creates in my mind :)
Uh-oh. Jim is in a jam.
;)
Poor Jim.
Loved the "bling on a floozy" bit :-D
Jim's in trouble. He's fixin' to light -up like a Christmas tree! It played out in my mind all too well. Almost thought I was actually going to witness old Jim's electrocution Bookie. Very good!~Ames
nice piece of writing...I was envisioning the electric chair. I guess to Jim, it might as well be.
YIKES. Excellent job setting the scene. I hope I never have to visit that one.
xoRobyn
Yikes! (100 word stories just beg for an ending don't they?!) Great writing!
♥Melody
MerrieMelody.blogspot.com
I don't watch action films for this very reason..makes my heart beat too fast, which is what this post did...(I loved the visual "like bling on a floozy"..hilarious comparison)
Ohhh, this is very good. Such an ominous tone for so few words. Very imaginative.
Oh, this is a good one! Love it!
Oh yes, I'm ready. Been ready!
It's in Greenwood which is east of Lees Summit on 150 highway. It's been there a long long time and has a great tea room! If you ever want to meet there, email me for I'd love to meet you, do some antiquing and have a great tea room lunch. And with antique malls (or antique anything) you never know what you're going to find! And there's other shops as well -- not quite as neat but more to look at. And it's a fairly big shop with a nice selection.
ooh...poor Jim!
I bet he tells, what do you think? ;) Well done.
Great story in a small space!
Anna
Wow. This felt like a novella. It's amazing how much vivid imagery you captured here.
Love this unusual direction...I never would have thought of this.
Really awesome writing.
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