Saturday, July 30, 2011

Saturday Centus, Hot Tears

Today is Centus Day again, and Jenny has tossed out a "hot" one today. We have had triple digits here for days and days in a row. The heat is taking a toll on people's nerves, not to mention on their electric bills! July has had no fun as it was too hot to be out under a heat warning. So...we are being robbed of summer by the very sun we waited all winter for!

Today Jenny gave us a 100 words and only a picture prompt to write our scenes or stories. Below is my effort. Go to Jenny's blog for full rules to play. http://jennymatlock.blogspot.com/2011/07/saturday-centus-no-words-can-convey.html


                                                          


                                         Hot Tears

Sarah shoved her groceries in the car and stole a look at the bank. The thermometer said 104 while sweat careened down her neck, through her crated breasts, under her waistband and headed for the back of her knees. She knew the car couldn’t get cool before she reached home, but it wasn’t getting any cooler dreading the trip.



Pulling into her driveway, she noted the lawn was crispy straw. The triple digit temps were taking a toll on everything, including her. Then, she dropped her grocery sack. As an egg firmed on the searing pavement, she began to cry.

21 comments:

Nonna Beach said...

Wow, I could feel every drip of sweat and every hot tear...so vivid and real...Excellent !!!

The Woodswoman said...

O.K., I'm drenched and dying here!!! Super word crafting ....

jeff campbell said...

Vividly hot...well written about a summer to remember...perhaps forget ;-) Peace and blessings

Happier Than a Pig in Mud said...

Well, I think you summed it all up perfectly! Stay cool:@)

Ames said...

I feel like her. Thank God for curtains and my birthday suit! Come on Fall!~Ames

bj said...

OMYGOSH...Love this! Have you written a book? You should.....:)

cj Schlottman said...

This is very visual and visceral at the same time. Love your phasing, like: "...sweat careened down her neck, through her crated breasts..." Evocative and a little funny at the same time. Crated? Love it.

The entire piece moves very smoothly and is very readable - two hallmarks of good writing, I think.

Namaste..........cj

beckyp said...

great post Well done

knightsheart said...

i felt the sweat and the frustration. Good flowing write.

Rawknrobyn.blogspot.com said...

Great imagery. I could see the sweat, the lawn, the egg. This also leaves me wanting more. You did a wonderful job!
xoRobyn

Dazee Dreamer said...

I have actually felt that way about the zapping heat. Great, great job.

Rinkly Rimes said...

How depressing! We're welcoming the coming Spring, but you make me dread February!

jfb57 said...

Oh what a brilliant piece. I could feel that water go on it's travels & how sad & exhausting the ending was. Excellent writing!

Sue said...

Wonderful the way you made us feel the heat.

=)

Jo said...

oh, poor girl ... i feel the heat and i am so sad for her ...

Gems said...

This post made me reach for a cool glass of water...really!!!! Great imagery.

laurie @ bargain hunting said...

Oh, I am so sorry for Sarah. You made me feel her pain. Good job. laurie

moondustwriter said...

hate that when I forget the code!!

I can see the sweat drip ( or maybe I can feel it)
and the yolk hitting in a splat - just had that a few weeks ago ( about 6 eggs lost it)

Anna said...

Great story! Wonderful use of the picture prompt! Your text really conveys the misery of hot weather and what can happen when it tires you out. You make mistakes and drop things. Very clever solution. Excellent Centus!!!!
Best wishes,
Anna
'John Tell, expert on tourism' Anna's SC wk 65

Anna said...

Hello again. I am looking for your SC-post for week 66 and can't seem to find it. In the meantime I would like to thank you for stopping by and reading and commenting on my SC-post for Week 66.
Bäst wishes,
Anna
For the benefit of other readers:
Sanna's Sunshine SC Wk 66

Jenny said...

Oh gosh. I know exactly how that feels. Almost every day lately I tell my husband we are moving to Alaska.

He laughs at me.

But I'm totally serious!

Thanks for linking up.

This was a great use of the picture prompt.