Saturday, November 13, 2010

Saturday Centus


First of all, a rousing weclome to the new followers Kathy B, bchenderson39, and Sara. I hope you like writing prompts because Jenny's is SUCH a fun place to write!!

This is Saturday Centus . The prompt must be used word for word somewhere in the story on not more than 100 words.The prompt is highlighted. For complete rules see:http://jennymatlock.blogspot.com.


                                                                   Tribute to Manhood

The early November sunshine cast golden rays on the dark and rippled lake water. Oak and cottonwood leaves drifted down like rainbow colored snowflakes pooling near the bank. It was Katie’s favorite fishing season when summer’s whining water toys and party boats were absent. Only dedicated fishermen remained under the weakening rays.



Katie watched Ron’s practiced arm cast out the baited line with the smoothness of a pitcher on the mound, her book open in her lap. The boat rocked to the water’s silent lullaby that made her drowsy. Everything was perfect except for mounting pressure she noticed in her bladder. If only she were a man!







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18 comments:

Deborah said...

Beautifully written and a great ending ... if only indeed!! :o)

razzamadazzle said...

Truly the one advantage of manhood! Loved this one.

Strummed Words said...

Ha, ha. I totally sympathize.

noexcuses said...

I was so caught up in the moment with your beautifully descriptive scene, I was taken by surprise with your ending. Wonderful story!

Sue said...

Love the ending. And the lead-up that makes it even more unexpected.

Good job!

=)

PS. I must say, as an aside, that their method of elimination is the only thing I've ever envied about being a man...and even then, only camping trips and long drives.

gautami tripathy said...

What an ending!

:D

echoeing parenthesis

Viki said...

LOL, didn't expect that at the end. That's exactly why I don't go boating, besides the seasickness, ha! I always so enjoy the descriptive way you write and like coming to see what you write on Saturday. Good job.

5thsister said...

Hee hee! I so wasn't expecting that! Well done!

Tina said...

Giggle. Good one!

Anna said...

Beautiful and sooooo funny! Love this!
Best wishes
Anna
Anna's SC wk 28

focused said...

Oh, that was unexpected! Hilarious. :)

jfb57 said...

Great picture painted & a fabulous twist at the end!

My name is PJ. said...

This was PERFECT! We were just talking yesterday about inventing a pee shooter for women!

Kat said...

This was so beautifully descriptive "rainbow colored snowflakes" - just perfection. And then the twist. Although you described that feeling perfectly too :) I really enjoyed this! Kat

Lynnie said...

Funny and well written! I really enjoyed this!

cj Schlottman said...

You set such a beautifully written scene, then wham! Great twist. Having been fishing with my husband many times, I can certainly empathize. Will spare you the details of our solution to the problem...........cj

Jenny said...

Love it! Love how you twisted this around and surprised us all!

Lovely, lovely writing.

Thank you for linking.

Jenny said...

Yikes. I fixed your other link, too! But here I am again!